Again, I'm being reminded about this concept when teaching children.
W's summary of Flat Stanley- an Original adventure by Jeff Brown
in his own words orally after I demonstrated how I would summarize the book. I did asked him to tell me where he think he should put a period. This is because I notice in his journal, the period is usually not in its proper place. I'm thinking the reason for this is perhaps there is too much things going on all at once for him, spelling, sentence mechanics, organizing his thoughts, etc.
He also paused after each sentence and thought about what he was going to say next and didn't connect all his sentences using "and then, and then, and then". This is a lot of improvement. YEAH for W!
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"There was a boy named Stanley. Stanley became flat because a bulletin board fell on him. Being flat has its advantages. For example, he could slip under doors, help his mom, and help the museum catch sneak thieves. But then, Flat Stanley didn't want to be flat because people called him "Flatty". Stanley went to his room where Arthur was sitting. (Arthur was his brother.
later added) Arthur pumped Stanley up with a bike pump. Stanley was very happy to be normal again."